This was a very good read, as was the other one! Your style isn't quite Dumas-esque, but this is all to the good IMO; you avoid stiltedness. Also, your grasp of the characters is very good! (Including the emo brooding, which I personally like, but then I am a shameless Athos fangirl.) Would love to see what you'd produce in the way of slash.

By the way, have you considered posting these in andoneforall? Or failing that, may I post a link? Am sure people would love to read your stories.