Two lines spring to mind -- Apollo saying "I can never die, it's not my fate," and Akhilleus after Patroklus's death: "Then let me die at once since it was not my fate to save my dearest comrade..." (Cousin, my *ass*.) i think it's thes econd. Don't recall exact citations.

I think you've a typo early on: there would take

And this is such major ouch I can't review properly yet.